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Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#person #life #luck
A plethora of folks
believe
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 that
individual’s
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 achievements are mostly related to
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fortune. I am firmly
opposite
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 to that statement due to two main considerations,
such
 as hard work and
skills
.
This
 essay will shed light on both reasons to get better apprehending. The foremost reason is toil or hard work . It is apparent that most
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successful
succesfull
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successful
 individuals bravely begin working
step -by-step
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 to pursue their aspirations. Even, the barriers and risks that they face in each
stages
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 are only comprehended as the part of
process
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 to be
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 great person in the future by leveraging self-analysis of the difficulties and weaknesses to
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 while the
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strength
strenght
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strengths
 and the opportunity
to be
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 advantages. So
as
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,
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 they can stabilize their motivation to be
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success
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 even
they
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 have to sacrifice much at the
first
 time. Taking Steve Jobs, the founder of Apple Inc, as
the
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 example. When the
first
 established the company, he faced many rejections
to get
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 funds from
the
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investors and banks. Even, he was regarded as
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crazy due to their strange ideas at that time.
However
, he still maintained his motivation
although
 the money was the
barriers
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.
Subsequently
, he tried to invite and cooperate with his peers to get along establishing the one of
greatest
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 inventions
such
 as
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iPhone
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 and
Ipod
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iPod
. Another reason is
skills
.
This
 element is salient
instead
 of merely depending on luck.
Although
 those were separated into two sides (hard skill and soft skill).
However
, both of them can support each
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other
eather
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other
 depending on the area and situation.
For instance
, the most notable player
on
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 football
such
 as Cristiano Ronaldo and Lionel Messi will not get the
thriumph
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triumph
 of
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 de ‘or if they do not have
skills
on
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 playing soccer. Compared to, Einstein
who
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has been admitted as one great scientist in
modern
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 age with his concept of relativity. Those awards will not be received without the
skills
 whether the
skills
 related to physical
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strength
strenght
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strength
 or brain capabilities. To conclude,
individual’s
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 accomplishments are not always in regard to
the
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fortune. Hard work and
skills
 are two
substansial
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substantial
 elements which support people to succeed
on
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 their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • luck
  • determination
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • skills
  • continuous learning
  • achievements
  • opportunities
  • networking
  • personal accountability
  • diverse backgrounds
  • access to resources
  • causality
  • creative industries
  • structured fields
  • linear
  • predicated on merit
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