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Today foods travel thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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In
this
 period of ,technology
people
 can
taste
food
 from all over the world, because consumers can import
food
 due availability of transportation.In my opinion , It has many merits which outweigh its demerits with
this
 notion and my opinion will be discussed in
further
 paragraphs with a suitable conclusion.
First
,
Food
 can be imported from most places by air or water . The storage facility is
also
 improved by which
food
 which tends to ruin easily can be stored for many days.
Additionally
 , Currency exchange is
also
 easy nowadays , so
farmers
 do not have to worry about payment. Now if we say about the bright side ,
farmers
 are getting a better amount of money than local markets;
for example
 , dollars have more value if converted into rupees.
Moreover
, Nowadays many
people
 are travelling overseas and they don'
t
 want to miss their
taste
 which tends to buy them imported
food
 of their preference from grocery stores.which makes
this
 trend more positive as they don'
t
 have to miss their favourite cuisines due to lack of ingredients.
On the other hand
,
This
 trend is impacting local
farmers
 because now consumers are more attracted to imported
food
 rather than local
food
 .
In addition
 to that ,some
people
 don'
t
 want to
taste
 new flavours and remain strict with their choices and flavours which makes
local
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the local
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 market less predictable and more and more
food
 gets wasted . Local
farmers
 are suffering so much due to
this
 as many
people
 in their area are trying different
food
 and can make that forever choice. To sum up , without any doubt , it is a mixed bag . But ,
certainly
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 it has more upsides than downsides. Considering as consumer side they don'
t
 have to worry about variety and
taste
 but it definitely impacts local
farmers
 .
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