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You have some library books that you are unable to return as a member of your family in another city has fallen sick and you have hand to go and look after them. Write a letter to the library. In you letter, you should: explaining the situation apologize for the inconvenience called and say what you are going to do

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Dear Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to
regarding
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apply
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you because I delay
return
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returning
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 my book to the library. Let me explain the
detail
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details
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 of
events
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the events
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.
Last
 week, I took my book to return to the library but I had an accident. My grandfather
called
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told
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 me that my grandmother
sicks
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is
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, they
are lives
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live
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 in another city. I left my city
this
 morning because my grandmother needs me more and I Will be back in two weeks later and I will come to the library to return the book. I am deeply sorry for the inconvenience and I beg you to give me more
times
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. Thank you for your understanding Regards Arni
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task achievement
Be more specific about the situation and try to avoid repetition. For example, you could detail what books you borrowed, the due date, and the exact nature of your grandmother's illness if appropriate.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the overall structure of your letter. Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea and follows logically from one to the next. For example, the explanation about the accident and your grandmother's sickness can be divided into two separate paragraphs.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for the context, showing respect and understanding of the library’s policies.
task achievement
The letter includes both an apology and an indication of what will be done in the future, which addresses the prompt well.
coherence cohesion
You have used a clear opening and closing, which helps to frame the content of your letter effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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