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The map depicts how three new places are constructed in Branfield
city
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. Overall, it is clearly observed that the town is completely redeveloped. The commercial undergoes considerable development, and a number of new places are built. With regard to recreational areas, the Golf course did not change. It lies in the west of the
city
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. On the commercial side, a new site is set up to the north of the
city
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 Centre and a piece of the Housing estate which is located in the north of the
city
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 was moved to the S1, and it is rebuilt to reduce its size. S1 is surrounded by many infrastructure features
such
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 as roads and railways and rivers.
On the other hand
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, S2 is built in the southeast of the
city
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. The industrial estate which is situated in the east of the
city
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 did not change. It is
also
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 worth mentioning that a new shopping Centre is set up.
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