Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today's society. To what extent do you agree or disagree .

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How
people
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are benefiting from
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VPN
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VPNs
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? What are the consequences of using
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VPN
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a VPN
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in terms of
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and
data
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protection? Do you think the
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should bring strict
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laws
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to control of usage of
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?
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advancement
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the advancement
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of
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some services have been provided
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users
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and
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VPN
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is one of them.
VPN
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stands for Virtual Private Network, in
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essay some beneficial functions of
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and securities which come from using the
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will be discussed;
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, whether the
government
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should regulate the strict legislation to control of
using
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of
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or not will be summarized as follows. There are several substantial impacts on using
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, through which
VPN
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users can benefit from them in aspects of
security
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.
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,
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could be able to secure
people
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's networks. To illustrate more,
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most businesses have their own networks, in which they put some specific
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into
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the theme
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theme
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themes
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. So, without a doubt,
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valuable
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could be kept safe from other
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businessmen
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business men
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through using
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.
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, another important function of
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is to hide
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information of individuals. Since it is easy to gain access to everyone's personal
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by various methods used by hackers, so it could be imperative for
people
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to
use
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VPN
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. A survey conducted in London has revealed that approximately 85% of
people
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whose bank
account
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and credit cards had been hacked by hackers, did not have
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.
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,
people
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can enjoy
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security
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, provided that they make
use
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of
VPNs
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.
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, there would be a question about ups which is whether the
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authorities need to exercise control over using of you or not
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I find it difficult to
use
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VPN
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VPNs
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it some strict rules are put by the
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because of
a
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main reason. I believe that the vast majority of
people
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needing to have
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a VPN
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VPN
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in order to secure their personal and private
informations
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information
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prefer to not
use
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them by reason of strict laws. So, individuals’ personal
data
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are highly likely to be impersonated by hackers and web
browser
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browsers
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, as a consequence of which insecurity will increase in society. To sum up,
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bring several significant merits for
people
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which have
positive
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a positive
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impact on their lives in terms of
security
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.
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one is to secure their networks and the
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of
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is hiding their personal information
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as important
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related to their bank account and credit and credit cards;
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,
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writer Is of the opinion that regulating strict legislation for controlling of usage of
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cannot be a good idea because of increasing the insecurity in society
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of not using the
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by
people
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.
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