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Some people think that the teenager’s years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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These days, many
people
 are talking about the happiest times of
people
’s lives. Some individuals believe that individuals have more joy during
teenage
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 years, while others claim that adult life is the happiest
time
. From my point of view, both of these perspectives have some merit, and the reasons for
this
 will be discussed below. To start with, as far
as
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the happiest times
of
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for
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 teenagers are due to their free
time
 to enjoy life to large extent, during their free
time
, all over the world, they can spend
time
 going out, playing video games or with their cellphones.
Secondly
, to a great degree, in every country, young
people
 have
less
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fewer
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preoccupations
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 and do not have bills to pay.
This
 results in being mind-free to have fun.
Therefore
, they are happier than adults.
On the other hand
, there are reasons that adults have more joy compared
with
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 young
people
.
First
 and foremost, by and large, in cities or towns, all through history, adults are financially free,
hence
, they have enough money to spend when going out in their leisure
time
 or whenever shopping.
Moreover
, in general, in both developed and developing countries,
people
 who reach adulthood have free will to choose whatever they wish. They do not need
parents’
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their parents’
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 approval. In conclusion, some
people
 think that young ages are the happiest lifetime, while others disagree.
However
, in my opinion, both of these are true, for the reasons discussed above.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Satisfaction
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Pressures
  • Novelty
  • Responsibilities
  • Priorities
  • Transition
  • Rite of passage
  • Holistic
  • Nostalgia
  • Existential
  • Resilience
  • Maturity
  • Self-actualization
  • Rejuvenation
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