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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #bout #history #house #research
Being interested
by
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in
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 researching the
history
 of the home where
people
 lives is
a
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an
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unusual
usual
unsual
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unusual
 trend in some countries.
At
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first
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 let’s see the reasons that push them to find out about
history
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the history
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 of their home. Some
people
lives
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live
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 in old towns where
the
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history
 was very important, like old capitals. They can discover important things about
others
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other
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 families, they could be
politician
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politicians
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, writers, kings, or simple farmers. It’s a
way
 to obtain souvenirs from the past, to give
to
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their
house
 a personality and a spirit.
IF
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people
 discover that their
house
 used to be a
house
 of a famous person or of an important person the value of the
house
 will change and they can sell it and earn
lot
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a lot
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 of money. The
house
 could be given to the government
like
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as
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 a heritage for the citizens. Some
people
 are unhappy in their life in their
house
, they think about mysterious things, they hear voices and they
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that their own
house
 is
habitated
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habituated
 by
gosts
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ghosts
guests
 and spirits, they try to know a soul
it
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in
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history
 for solving their problems. Now we can speak about the
way
 that can help them to research
into
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this
 subject. The
first
way
 to help
people
 to know about things nowadays is
internet
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the internet
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. It is the easiest
way
to begin
a
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research. They can try to have information on the
town
,
then
 on the
neibourhood
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neighbourhood
 and at least on their own
house
. The other
way
 and the best
way
 for obtaining serious
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 is to go to the council of the
town
 and do a
requiest
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request
. Normally, each
town
 or each region has
his
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its
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archieve
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archive
, They can try to go there and to read about their
town
 maybe they will discover that their own
house
 was something important. In my
opinion
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 it is very hard to have information about our own
house
 mostly about
it
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its
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history
, but if it was built on
a
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an
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archeological
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archaeological
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 site it could be a good idea to do research on it. Trying to find information on
internet
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the internet
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, by our council, in the
archieves
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archives
, or with the help of a notary can be useful to them and to the country.
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