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Some people claim that it is acceptance to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary era, many hybrid changes have taken place. With the enhancement of ,science it could
also
 be seen that there a various amounts of benefits as well as many medicational properties that could be received through these creatures. Now masses are of different opinions that whether these living organisms should be used in medical exploration or not. The viewpoint for the following and an opinion would be discussed in the upcoming paragraph. One school of thought suggests that the masses think that using
animals
 in exploration could yield some educational information as the animal planet contains wonders in them.
For instance
, there are some snakes whose poison is used in making many skin care medicine.
Moreover
, if a new medication is to be launched on the market they are
first
 tested on
animals
 as they have similar body structures and cell components.
This
 makes analysis possible without affecting any human being with side effects. But should we consider it beneficial? The answer to
this
 is quite astonishing. It is very cruel to have
animals
 as test subjects.
Animals
also
 have a soul in them and they sometimes go through immense pain during these tests. To exemplify, if they are given medicine which is still under development and later on if it posed any kind of different effect
then
animals
 would not be able to tell. Sometimes investigation could take a sinister turn because while experiments there could be the chance of mistakes that could create a mutated animal. Having mulled over the aforementioned views it could be concluded that
animals
 do give us some beneficial properties so to find more about
animals
 should be used in probe,
however
 taking proper care of the
animals
 well being is
also
 a great necessity. The chances of human errors should be reduced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biomedical research
  • ethical dilemma
  • inhumane treatment
  • alternative methodologies
  • animal welfare
  • regulatory standards
  • clinical trials
  • synthetic models
  • genetic engineering
  • bioethics
  • sentience
  • pharmacological safety
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