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More and more people are choosing to eat healthy food and exercise regularly. Why? What can we do to encourage this?

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According to the new changes in technology and science, there is
also
 a greater change in many
people
’s lifestyles.
People
 are starting to adopt healthier ways of living, including a more health-conscious diet and frequent
exercise
. In
this
 essay. I will outline the reasons behind it and introduce some ways to develop it in the future. There are several reasons why nowadays many
people
 tend to consume healthy food and try to
exercise
 regularly.
To begin
 with,
people
 can keep fit by burning calories when they
exercise
. The more they eat, the more they
exercise
 so that they will not gain weight ever again.
Moreover
, by combining it with a healthy way of eating, they can have stronger muscles and bones.
Secondly
,
people
 will increase their life expectancy since they delete fat from their bodies which helps to support the digestive system.
Also
, it will somehow prevent
people
 from having diseases and benefit them to a longer life. To the demands of
people
, they now can have a lot of ways to encourage an active lifestyle.
Initially
, schools can open more physical activities for children to participate in when they are still at a young age which leads to the fitness level of a nation’s population can be better maintained in the long term.
For example
, schools allow more football and basketball competitions or introduce other typical exercises
such
 as running and jogging. In the
second
 place, healthier food should be lower priced since not many poor families can afford it when they want to have a healthier lifestyle. To conclude, there are two specific reasons why more
people
 are making an active lifestyle and
people
 can encourage
this
 trend by adding more activities and assisting in the accessibility of healthy food.
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