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In many workplaces, online communication is becoming more commonplace than face-to-face meetings, and this is a positive development. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, online
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 getting popular in workplaces and many peoples prefer to have official meetings using Teams and Zoom software rather than physical interaction. I believe that
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 because it provides flexibility to attend and participate from any corner of the world. In
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 and explain my stance. Due to the advancement in the field of science and technology
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 became much easier than in past .Many official meetings are held today online, which provides flexibility to users to attend from any corner around the globe. Software like Teams, Google meet and Zoom provides key features like Video calls in order to discuss official matters.
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, during a pandemic when all offices were closed down but these smart
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 ways help office staff to stay connected and aligned with work. For these reasons, I believe that
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smart
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 ways are really beneficial for mankind. Many points discussed above which are in the favor of
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. As a consequence physical interaction within the office is less common nowadays. People can focus more on their work rather than spending several hours on
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attending office meetings. Now Sales and Marketing staff
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 present their products virtually to customers by showing detailed information and features that were not practical in past and saved time for both parties.
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, from my perspective,
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 approach is time-saving and up to the required business
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 standards. In conclusion, in
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 I discussed the importance of smart
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 and their demand in today's world. In my opinion, I believe that
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 is a positive
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, not only user-friendly but
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 a time-saving approach .I think in foreseeable future smart
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 will be a quite common business practice and adopted in almost all enterprises as a means of business
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • collaboration
  • efficiency
  • real-time editing
  • digital whiteboards
  • nuanced understanding
  • relationship-building
  • team cohesion
  • exacerbating
  • isolation
  • remote work
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