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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice

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In recent times, most
students
 are working before their higher studies in universities. I personally believe that it is the right option for
students
 who
work
 part-time basis because they can mainly save some
money
 and
also
 they can learn to live their life without relay on others. There are so many benefits if
students
work
 before their college degree, but the prominent merits are
students
 can study with their own
money
 with a job and
also
 they can help their family in some ways.
For example
, if someone has more than two siblings in their family
then
 they can help them financially by using their own
money
 for studies and which may reduce financial burdens for their
parents
. So
parents
 just have to spend
money
 on one child and the rest of the
money
 can save for the future.
Secondly
,
students
 can master how to live their life without depending on their parent's income.
For instance
, if they want to buy a book or any study material, they no need to ask their
parents
 to get it for them because they can buy that book or anything that they want easily with their earnings. ,
Finally
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 they can earn some working experience before their tertiary education would help them to get
in
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into
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 the working atmosphere.
In addition
, there are
also
 a few drawbacks when
students
work
 before their college graduation. some
students
 may have a chance to use that
money
 in the wrong way
such
 as gambling and drugs. To conclude
this
 topic, the sunny sides are larger than the darker side so, it is always better for the
students
 to
work
 at universities study ,
however
, they should spend all their
money
 under
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the
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supervision of their
parents
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • mature
  • responsibility
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • career exploration
  • financial independence
  • work ethic
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