Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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People
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have different views about whether the
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of scientific data, business knowledge and academic research should be shared as much as they can. While a spirit of sharing can sometimes be admired, I believe that some of the significant
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should be kept by the authors. On the one hand, it is perhaps even more important for
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to have
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to focus on their study fields. Even though sharing can be a noble quality that
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by
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, it can not be a continued motivation for researchers to keep studying. Whereas, rewarding is much more likely to be an efficient and realistic way to encourage the researchers constantly in the future.
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, pupils who won the math competition with
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in primary school, are willing to keep learning and
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winning the prize
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, sharing important
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the public without supervision can sometimes be dangerous. An amount of news about
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who have antisocial
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against the public and government have been reported.
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, sharing
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such
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as knowledge or skills
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public
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is able to
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society
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development. If many
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share ideas, they all benefit from the ideas of other
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and so can make better and quicker progress in their chosen field. And sharing
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others can sometimes
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ourselves
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. Since
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need to show results and data to the public, they are more likely to check their works carefully, eliminating errors, and improving
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accuracy, because others will look more critically
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our work than us. In conclusion, I can understand the benefits of sharing
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the public, it indeed helped society keep progressing in some ways. But it seems to me that we should hold a cautious attitude
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sharing certain important
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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