Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
People
have different views about whether the information
of scientific data, business knowledge and academic research should be shared as much as they can. While a spirit of sharing can sometimes be admired, I believe that some of the significant information
should be kept by the authors.
On the one hand, it is perhaps even more important for people
to have enthusiasm
to focus on their study fields. Even though sharing can be a noble quality that Change the article
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is admired
public
, it can not be a continued motivation for researchers to keep studying. Whereas, rewarding is much more likely to be an efficient and realistic way to encourage the researchers constantly in the future. Add an article
the public
For instance
, pupils who won the math competition with prize
in primary school, are willing to keep learning and Add an article
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Furthermore
, sharing important information
to
the public without supervision can sometimes be dangerous. An amount of news about Change preposition
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people
who have antisocial personality
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personalities
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against the public and government have been reported.
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On the other hand
, sharing informations
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pieces of information
such
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public
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the public
benefits
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society
development. If many Change noun form
society's
people
share ideas, they all benefit from the ideas of other people
and so can make better and quicker progress in their chosen field. And sharing information
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helped
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help
ourselves
. Since Correct pronoun usage
us
people
need to show results and data to the public, they are more likely to check their works carefully, eliminating errors, and improving the
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on
our work than us.
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information
to
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite