Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

People
have different views about whether the
information
of scientific data, business knowledge and academic research should be shared as much as they can. While a spirit of sharing can sometimes be admired, I believe that some of the significant
information
should be kept by the authors. On the one hand, it is perhaps even more important for
people
to have
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to focus on their study fields. Even though sharing can be a noble quality that
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by
public
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, it can not be a continued motivation for researchers to keep studying. Whereas, rewarding is much more likely to be an efficient and realistic way to encourage the researchers constantly in the future.
For instance
, pupils who won the math competition with
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in primary school, are willing to keep learning and
keeping
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winning the prize
afterward
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.
Furthermore
, sharing important
information
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the public without supervision can sometimes be dangerous. An amount of news about
people
who have antisocial
personality
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using pioneer technology
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against the public and government have been reported.
On the other hand
, sharing
informations
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information
pieces of information
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such
as knowledge or skills
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public
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is able to
benefits
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the
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society
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development. If many
people
share ideas, they all benefit from the ideas of other
people
and so can make better and quicker progress in their chosen field. And sharing
information
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others can sometimes
helped
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ourselves
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. Since
people
need to show results and data to the public, they are more likely to check their works carefully, eliminating errors, and improving
the
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accuracy, because others will look more critically
on
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our work than us. In conclusion, I can understand the benefits of sharing
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the public, it indeed helped society keep progressing in some ways. But it seems to me that we should hold a cautious attitude
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sharing certain important
information
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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