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Some people say there is no need for print newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #print #newspapers
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Technology today has brought changes in all walks of life. The print media is slowly been replaced by online media. People are becoming more tech-
savy
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savvy
 and they prefer everything online, including
news
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. I totally agree with some people's view that printing of the
newpapers
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newspapers
newspaper
 is no longer required.
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, nowadays, most
newspapers
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 have
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online
apps
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 wherein they post
news
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 and headlines in a brief and concise manner.
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 majority of
population
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the population
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 is busy and
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 they prefer these
news
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apps
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 to keep themselves updated over the actual physical copy.
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, the
news
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 on these
apps
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keep
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 updating on a
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real time
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 basis and
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, we do not need to wait for the
next
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 day to update ourselves. Due to the digital records, it is
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 easy to refer to
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past
news
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 at a click of a button.
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, by not printing
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newspapers
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, we can help save our trees.
Newspapers
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 are made of recycled material as well as wood pulp.
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, making them digital will be environmentally beneficial. Though there is still some population that prefer reading
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 a printed newspaper.
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, the older generation prefers reading
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 in the morning along with a cup of tea to sip on. They are not well versed with
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technology as much as the younger generation is.
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, in the parts of the country where internet connectivity is still an issue people rely on
newspapers
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 to keep themselves updated.
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, studies and research over
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 few years have shown that online media reach is increasing throughout the country and the world.
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, the printing of
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 should be replaced by
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online
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 due to its overweighing advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital revolution
  • sustainability
  • instantaneous
  • editorial integrity
  • demographic disparities
  • gatekeeping in journalism
  • nostalgic value
  • economic viability
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