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It is often said that governements spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

#governements #money #projects #wildlife
Undoubtedly it is true fact because in the cutting-edge era life of wild
animals
 is on its passing . For their
decease
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 there are ample reasons reasonable . Most lawmakers spend chunks of money on projects to save wildlife, ,
however
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 there are other
problems
 that are more vital . I agree with
this
 notion and I will discuss the reasons in the ensuing paragraphs . To commence with , there are a lot of
animals
 in our environment . But some of the
animals
 are very dangerous and their life will be at
its
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 demise . Mainly authorities spend currency on many projects but some
problems
 are responsible for
this
 . The primary one is the law . It is a very crucial part for save man . To explain it , the government already spend money on projects but they didn't make rules for wild
animals
 .
For example
 , Asia is one of the regions where
animals
 feel safe rather than in other countries because
such
part
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 of Asia like India , and Russia make new rules for mammals .
Hence
 , it helps to save their lives.
Moreover
 , the
climate
 is
other
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 main problem that helps to get an impact
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animals
 . To explain it , authorities never
changes
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 the
climate
 with the help of property so the
climate
 is one of the other dark
problems
 for
animals
 .
For example
 , in some areas of Asia where the weather is too hot all the year . So wildlife faced many hurdles regarding the temperature . In 2022 , 50
percent
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 of
animals
death
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 with the cause
of
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climate
 .
Thus
 , the
climate
 is a very effective aspect for
animals
 . To sum up , pay is not enough to save
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a soul
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soul
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. Without a good temperature and law
animals
 die day by day . So these two
problems
 are very dangerous and worsen the life of
animals
 .
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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