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Research shows that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people engage in unhealthy activities.

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The study has shown that some pursuits are positive for health and others are detrimental. In spite of knowing that, millions of
people
 indulge in activities that are unhealthy.
This
 essay will discuss contributing factors and solutions to tackle
such
 a catastrophic issue.
To begin
 with, the factors that are responsible for the problem. The primary cause appears to be the taste
that is
 common among the
people
 who consume fast
food
such
 as noodles, high cholesterol-containing, and other roadside
food
items
.
For instance
, if they continue to have
such
 unhealthy eating habits for a longer period of
time
, which may lead to serious health ailments
such
 as high cholesterol levels, blood pressure, and eventually heart failure. Another reason seems to be a lack of
time
. Today, both father and mother in a family are breadwinners, so after they return from work, they might probably have only very limited
time
 to do their chores. In
such
 cases, they are not only able to find
time
 for cooking but
also
time
 for physical activities, which may lead them to a sedentary lifestyle, resulting in obesity. To address these issues government and
people
's participation are vital.
Firstly
, governments should implement high taxes on
food
items
 that are not healthy. By doing
this
,
people
 might show less interest to have processed and packaged
food
items
 rather they may try healthy and organic
food
items
 which are comparatively less cost.
Secondly
,
people
 should take voluntary decisions to find
time
 for cooking and doing exercise as they are aware of the future complications of having packaged foods and a sedentary lifestyle. In conclusion,
although
people
 are aware of the consequences of deleterious activities, still they take part that
this
 is mainly due to the fact that processed
food
 tastes better and poor
time
 management.
This
 can be tackled by the effort of the government and individuals.
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