A review of a tourist attraction for a tourist website

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I recently visited a place in Japan called

Akihabra

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Akihabara

city

. It's a shopping district and a

city

. It sells many anime

figurones

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figurines

figures

and merchandise. It

also

sells comics and manga. I stayed in

Akihabra

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Akihabara

for about a week. From my observation,

Akihabra

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Akihabara

city

is always crowded 24/7. It's a non-stop tourist attraction for anime fans around the world. According to the price, it's pretty affordable. A normal figurine costs about a few thousand yen. But the limited

edition's

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cost a whole lot more. There are inns in the

city

. Where I stayed, the inn was not the best, considering the cheap price. I don't recommend staying in the inns close

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in the

city

as they tend to be dirty sometimes.

Instead

, maybe choose an inn

that is

farther from the

city

. The food sold there

were

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just typical Japanese food like Ramen and sushi but they are very cheap compared to the ones in Tokyo. The

city

also

has arcade areas with the most popular machines

that

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'gachaponn' or gacha machines. I would recommend

this

place

for

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anime fans but I don't recommend

this

place to non-anime fans because it would be uncomfortable

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them not to understand what's going on.

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A review of a tourist attraction for a tourist website

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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university, while others claim that a university education should be a universal right.

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