Companies should provide sports facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree?

It is undeniable that social responsibility became one of the huge factors of a big
companies'
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success. In order to get recognition and support local ,
communities
it is normal for
companies
to fulfil local's desires.
Therefore
, I agree with the idea that
companies
should try their best to provide, support to local
communities
. On the one hand, providing
sports
facilities for local
communities
should be
government's
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job.
Firstly
, having
sports
facilities is not only related to
sports
activity but
also
it can affect a lot of people`s health.
For example
, in Ulaanbaatar
city
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there is research that shows that in residential
areas
with availability of physical activity and better air quality, children`s sickness rate is much less compared to other
areas
during the winter.
Secondly
, encouraging children to do
sports
activities might result in having Olympics champions in the future.
Obviously
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it has a lot of advantages for locals.
On the other hand
, if
companies
take charge in
areas
that the government can not
themreach
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them reach
the reach
then reach
,
then
people would be grateful for that.
For instance
, heavy industries or factories that take a lot of natural recourses have some negative effects on local
communities
. In
such
a situation it is
also
can be an advantage for a company to take a part in people`s everyday life, and spread
a positive messages
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to their employers.
Therefore
, it is an opportunity for them to contribute to society and increase their customer retention and loyalty. To conclude, it is
government's
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responsibility to create common
areas
for their people to relax, and to do some physical activities.
However
, in some
countries
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there are not enough resources to build these places so
companies
should step in and contribute to their society since it
also
benefits the
companies
' profit after all
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