Fast food is a part of life in many place. Some people think this has bad effects in lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons

Fast
food
such
as
McDonald
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McDonald's
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,
KFC
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has
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become a crucial part of survival in many areas. A certain section of people believes that it is an unhealthy diet and bad effect on their
lifestyle
. In
this
context, I do agree that junk
food
is unhealthy for our daily diet. I will elaborate
further
on the rationale behind the above statement.
First
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of foremost, junk
food
has always been considered unhealthy,
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however
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due to our busy
lifestyle
, we tend to ignore the fact and consume it daily without our knowledge. Fast
food
is more flavourful than healthy
food
. Consuming healthy
food
daily for certain individuals has become a boring selection,
therefore
they tend to choose unhealthy
food
over healthy
food
. In modern days for convenience's
sake
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many parents serve fast
food
to their adolescents. To illustrate
this
, in research it was indicated that in Sri Lanka, approximately 40% of students consume burgers, and fries during their lunch break as well as for dinner.
Secondly
, daily consumption of unhealthy is not a nutritional diet to eat up.
This
can lead to non-communicable diseases at an early stage
such
as cholesterol, diabetes and so on.
Moreover
, it will
also
lead to obesity, with our busy-paced lives as many individuals lack in their exercise as well.
For example
, to describe my
lifestyle
I am a big fan of junk
food
, during weekdays after work, for my ,convenience I get cravings to purchase burgers from a local joint called Street burgers. Deep down I know it is not very healthy,
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however
for short-term ,
,
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happiness
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I consume it for dinner. In conclusion, in my point of view
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,
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it is mandatory that we make an effort to maintain a healthy
lifestyle
regardless of our busy
lifestyle
. Consuming unhealthy
food
will be a big impact on our lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • culinary culture
  • wholesome meals
  • inherently
  • health consequences
  • nutritional options
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