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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do certain unpaid work instead of being put behind the bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The bar chart compares the amounts of
electricity
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 produced and consumed by ten
nations
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 in 2014. Generally, China was simultaneously the largest
electricity
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 producer and consumer over the period shown. The similarity among the ten mentioned
nations
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 was production recorded a marginally higher figure than consumption, except
Germany
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for Germany
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. In 2014, China generated nearly 5.400
billion
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kWh
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, which is the highest figure on the chart, compared to over 4.000
billion
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kWh
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 created by the US. In both
nations
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, less
electricity
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 was used in comparison with produced, at approximately 5.300 and 3.900
billion
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kWh
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 respectively. The other
nations
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 showed a large disparity in
electricity
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 production and consumption
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 the two aforementioned
nations
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. The striking features were Russia recorded a trivial difference between the quantities of
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 energy production and consumption, with just over 1.000
billion
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kWh
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, and Germany showed a big contrast when using more
electricity
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 than how much is produced, at 526 and 582
billion
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kWh
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 respectively. Korea, opposite to China, created the least
electricity
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 and
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 consumed the lowest amount, recording under 500
billion
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kWh
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rehabilitation
  • incarceration
  • recidivism
  • reintegration
  • community service
  • work ethics
  • exploitation
  • decongest
  • taxpayer
  • correctional facility
  • unpaid labor
  • safety concerns
  • constructive activity
  • underlying issues
  • restorative justice
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