At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
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are
a large amount of population of Change the verb form
is
younger
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the younger
generation
compare with the proportion of older Use synonyms
people
in several nations Use synonyms
in
nowadays. In my opinion, I Change preposition
apply
reckons
that the advantages are more than the disadvantages with Change the verb form
reckon
this
situation and I will claim my reasons in Linking Words
this
essay.
Countries are tended to be vivid with a relatively high proportion of young Linking Words
adults
. Use synonyms
Firstly
, Linking Words
young
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the young
generation
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are
more likely to make progress Change the verb form
is
at
science Change preposition
in
technology
between 20 to 30 years old, which is the golden period for Correct word choice
and technology
people
to gain knowledge due to Use synonyms
the
boosting curiosity. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, the curiosity of Linking Words
young
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the young
generation
can push Use synonyms
the
social development to go forward. Correct article usage
apply
Secondly
, the physical condition of young Linking Words
adults
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are
much better than Correct subject-verb agreement
is
the
Correct your spelling
that
older
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of older
people
, with the strong body they have, they are able to Use synonyms
caring
the old with community service. Change the verb
care
For instance
, many universities Linking Words
recruits
students Change the verb form
recruit
for
volunteers in terms of taking care of Change preposition
as
the
older Correct article usage
apply
people
in hospital. Use synonyms
Finally
, since the young Linking Words
generation
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are
the major consumers of society, the GDP can Change the verb form
is
developed
more quickly with more young Change the verb form
be developed
develop
people
.
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In contrast
, there are several disadvantages Linking Words
with
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to
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an aging
aging
society. It is unavoidable that older Change the spelling
ageing
people
have more health issues than Use synonyms
the
young Correct article usage
apply
adults
on Use synonyms
average
level. Correct article usage
an average
That is
to say, the governments have to spend Linking Words
a
giant figures of money on Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
the
health insurance for taking care of the old Correct article usage
apply
people
, which brings burdens and problems to the government's financial systems. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the young Linking Words
generation
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are
likely to pay more taxes to the governments for holding the health Change the verb form
is
insurances
running.
In conclusion, my view is that the more young Fix the agreement mistake
insurance
adults
a country Use synonyms
have
, the more vivid society it is and the less burden the government should Correct subject-verb agreement
has
carried
.Change the verb form
carry
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