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Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today, most businesses involved in the food industry are more concerned about profits than their customer`s
health
,
thus
 we could witness the same issue in
schools
 as well.
Schools
 are aware that it is a great source of income since many students prefer to eat tasty food ignoring all the
health
 concerns.
This
 essay will discuss why junk foods and sugary drinks are bad for students'
health
 and how those factors could impact them in long term. Most junk foods lack nutrients which
children
 need on daily basis. Especially they lack vitamins which are really essential to develop their bodies in the right way. Losing
such
 vital vitamins could result in many
health
 problems.
For example
, nowadays, we could see many
children
 wear spectacles at early stages due to a lack of vitamin D and vitamin A. We could
also
 see sugary drinks which contain a lot of
sugar
 in order to make them tastier.
For instance
, do you know a cup of 200ml of Coke contains 80g of
sugar
 ?
Although
 a child needs only 5g of
sugar
 per day, having one cup of Coke will cover the
sugar
 level a child needs for 16 days.
Sugar
 not only brings many
health
-related issues
,
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but,
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children
also
 could get easily addicted to sugary drinks which will be a habit they won`t be able to stop for a long time. In conclusion, Junk foods could easily kill
children
 more than any other way. It is important for
schools
 to be more concerned about
children
`s
health
 rather than the profits they generate from it. In my opinion, most
schools
 are money oriented and they hardly care about their students,
therefore
, it is important for
health
 organisations and the government to step up and take necessary actions to stop
this
.
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