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Some people argue that capital punishment is good for the country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A fraction of
people
claims
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 that the death sentence is better for the nation to make
crime
-free places to live for
people
. I firmly agree with the given statement.
This
 punishment can reduce the
crime
 rate and maintain harmony and happiness in the
country
 as a
crime
-free place.
To begin
 with, the extreme penalty for the heinous
crime
 can lessen the
crime
 ratio in the nation. Criminals feel discouraged to do any extreme illegal act when they know, they will get punished if they involve in these
activities
 by knowing the law and
this
 leads to no
crime
 in the
country
.
For instance
, everyone cares about their families and prevents their families from suffering no one will like to get an extreme penalty as they know what will happen to their families in their absence.
Therefore
, illegal
activities
 reduce.
Furthermore
,
people
 from outside of the nation will
also
 be concerned about the strict law of the
country
 and will not do any criminal
activities
 that lead to capital punishment. In
this
 way, the
country
 will maintain its integrity and harmony in the world.
Additionally
, worldwide tourists from foreign countries like to visit safer or
crime
-free places. To illustrate
this
, most
people
 book tours to visit Singapore as it is a safer place to live worldwide. To conclude, for maintaining happiness and growth and making it a peaceful area to live, extreme punishment by implementing strict laws is the best option to deal with criminal
activities
 and
crime
.
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