In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantage of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In the coming years, automatic
vehicles
will be operated technically.
Passengers
will be the only people who will be using these cars,
buses
and trucks . Unemployment issues which
arises
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from
this
phenomenon cannot be compared to the
improving
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in the adequacy of
time
and safety of
passengers
.
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is what my essay shall be discussing. On one hand,
development
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of unemployment will be rampant. There is a higher percentage of many individuals remaining unemployed in the near future once the existence of advanced automatic
vehicles
comes to stay. Many drivers of cars,
buses
and trucks will find
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difficulty
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to make ends meet with their family since driving
of
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these
vehicles
are
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their only means of income to cater for themselves and support their families.
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, a survey conducted by the minister for road and transport Honourable Peter Awuku in 2017 on the number of
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employment
opportunity
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opportunities
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in Ghana revealed that almost 85percent of the population of Ghana
are
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involved in driving as a profession as their main
jobs
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or a
part
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time
job.
However
advancement
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the advancement
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of automatic
vehicles
will improve
upon
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the financial
standard
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of the economy since
increase
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prices of petrol and other
vehicle related
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items will always enrich the economy with more money.
On the other hand
,
time
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management of people will be improved. When
vehicles
are ad advanced to operate by themselves, it will save
passengers
the problems of being delayed to work or their destinations.
This
will go a long way to
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reduce
the issues of traffic jams on roads since
vehicles
will be operated
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my
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a computer and not by man.
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example
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a survey conducted by final year students of engineering in Kwame Nkrumah
university
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of Science and Technology in Ghana on the use of public
buses
revealed that people are not able to get to their destinations on
time
due to the poor work of drivers and their assistants.
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advancement
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in
vehicles
to operate on their own will promote the safety of
passengers
. To conclude, there will be an advancement in cars,
buses
and trucks to operate on their own in future. The sole individuals travelling in these automatic
vehicles
will be
passengers
,
as a
result
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problems of unemployment shall never conquer the positivity of
time
accuracy and safety of
passengers
.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
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