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Writing Samples
Band 6

You organised a 90th birthday party in a hotel for a relative. Many elderly guests attended this party which of grand success. Write a letter to thank the hotel manager. In your letter, Give details of party the reasons why party was successful Mention a staff member who helped you a lot

Dear
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Sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing
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 letter to thank you and your crew. We did gather up to celebrate my grandfather's 90's birthday in Sunset Hotel
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 Saturday and your crew did a great job. A lot of
elder
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elderly
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 people came to
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 party so I requested some special treatment, especially helping them with their needs kindly.
Party
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The party
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 has an Italian theme as my grandfather was born in Italy but he had to immigrate and couldn't go back so he
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 his culture. The decorations were amazing and the
foods
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are
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was
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 even better! The cake's colours were green, red, and white just like the flag and my family loved
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 detail. Everyone enjoyed their meal and the environment was quite cosy. I have to thank specifically Mrs. Philips because she was helpful to my grandmother. She helped her to walk when I wasn't around her. My nanny said how kind she is. Yours faithfully, Elif Beyza Önder

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer paragraphs to separate ideas better.
task response
Add a little more detail about the success of the party, such as guest feedback or special moments.
task response
You provided specific details about the party's theme and decorations, which is great!
suitable writing tone
Your letter had a polite tone, which is perfect for thanking someone.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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