Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the modern scenario,
people
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have to pay entrance charges for many public places. Even a number of
museums
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are charged, while
rest
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the rest
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are free of charge. It is agreed that
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benefits
benifits
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benefits
surpass the drawbacks of applying tickets for entering
to
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apply
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museums
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since
,
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conjestion
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congestion
would
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be reduced
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as well as money could be allocated for renovations.
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,
majority
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the majority
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of the visitors who visit
to
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museum
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museums
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just because they are free.
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, a number of
museums
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are
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overcrowded
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over crowded
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overcrowded
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. If their management
implement
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a charging scheme for
people
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, it would be helped to settle
in
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apply
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some
extend
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extent
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of
above
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issue.
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, it is widely used that charging schemes for vehicles if they drive through the busiest road and towns which are highly
poplated
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populated
and too many traffic
conjestions
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congestions
congestion
.
Therefore
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,
people
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could enjoy the arts, cravings, history and monuments in
museums
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with
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a calm
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quiet
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quite
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quiet
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environment.
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, renovations and basic
infrastructurs
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infrastructure
infrastructures
could be done by using
these money
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. Most of the
museums
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do not have proper direction systems, lighting, pathways, security systems,
cafetaria
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cafeteria
and
lavetry
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lavatory
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facilities which are essentials for visitors.
Then
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,
people
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would be happy to pay, if they receive
a
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apply
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validity for their money.
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although
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most
of
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the
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apply
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developed countries
initially
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allocate funds to start public places, charging systems have been implemented for their maintenance. In conclusion, according to a
museum
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the charging system may vary, while some are
charge
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charged
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off
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.
However
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,
pros
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the pros
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of
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to
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charging for
museums
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more than cons because
,
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apply
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people
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have
chance
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a chance
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to experience
a
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upgrade and peaceful museum.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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