Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
In the modern scenario,
people
have to pay entrance charges for many public places. Even a number of museums
are charged, while rest
are free of charge. It is agreed that Correct article usage
the rest
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benefits
benifits
surpass the drawbacks of applying tickets for entering Correct your spelling
benefits
to
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museums
since,
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conjestion
would Correct your spelling
congestion
be reduces
as well as money could be allocated for renovations.
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be reduced
Firstly
, majority
of the visitors who visit Correct article usage
the majority
to
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museum
just because they are free. Fix the agreement mistake
museums
As a result
, a number of museums
are Correct your spelling
overcrowded
over crowded
. If their management Correct your spelling
overcrowded
implement
a charging scheme for Change the verb form
implements
people
, it would be helped to settle in
some Change preposition
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extend
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extent
above
issue. Add an article
the above
For instance
, it is widely used that charging schemes for vehicles if they drive through the busiest road and towns which are highly poplated
and too many traffic Correct your spelling
populated
conjestions
. Correct your spelling
congestions
congestion
Therefore
, people
could enjoy the arts, cravings, history and monuments in museums
with
a calm Change preposition
in
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quiet
quite
environment.
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quiet
Secondly
, renovations and basic infrastructurs
could be done by using Correct your spelling
infrastructure
infrastructures
these money
. Most of the Change the determiner
this money
museums
do not have proper direction systems, lighting, pathways, security systems, cafetaria
and Correct your spelling
cafeteria
lavetry
facilities which are essentials for visitors. Correct your spelling
lavatory
slavery
Then
, people
would be happy to pay, if they receive a
validity for their money. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, although
most of
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the
developed countries Correct article usage
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initially
allocate funds to start public places, charging systems have been implemented for their maintenance.
In conclusion, according to a museum
the charging system may vary, while some are Add a comma
,museum
charge
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charged
off
. Replace the word
of
However
, pros
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the pros
of
charging for Change preposition
to
museums
more than cons because,
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people
have chance
to experience Correct article usage
a chance
a
upgrade and peaceful museum.Change the article
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