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Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Growing children are more fragile and required careful nurturing. A few folks say that if pupils are rewarded rather than punished, they would give better
performance
 in school. I partially agree with the statement because ,in my opinion,
students
'
performance
 equally depends on both rewards and
punishment
. In
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 I would discuss both the claims and support my opinion with relevant examples and explanations. On the one side,
students
' outcomes would be good if they are rewarded for their favourable actions. Because rewards act as encouragement in their studies and
this
 encouragement would allow them to work much harder than before to get good marks in their studies.
As a result
, their
performance
 would be improved to a certain extent. On the other side, the same as a reward,
punishment
also
 improves their outcome in school.
for example
, if the
students
 are not doing their homework properly, teachers used to give them
punishment
 to write the task 2 times,
this
punishment
 would help them to remember the difficult task as it is repeated several times. In the end, their
performance
 would be better than before.
Hence
, both the task's rewards and chastisement play
a similar roles
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 in terms of
students
' outcomes as it depends on the
way
 it is given. In conclusion,pupils''
performance
 depends on the
way
 they took the reward and chastisement. if they take a chastisement in a positive
way
, they give a good
performance
 the same
way
, if they take a reward as a compliment they would try to get another gift by performing better in the future.
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