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Nowadays people depend on technology in their free time. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In contemporary society, the influence of
technology
 on many aspects of our life is undeniable. Especially, citizens seem to rely significantly on their leisure
time
 on technological
entertainment
, which impacts both positively and negatively on both individuals and society. In the course of
this
 essay, I would elaborate on the advantages and drawbacks of
technology
entertainment
 before giving a rational conclusion.
To begin
 with, thanks to the development of
technology
, there is a variety of virtual games that have been designed attractively and interactively, beneficial to humankind in amusing themself after a long
time
 of working. Young people in the fast-paced period,
for example
, seeming to turn out to be workaholism could release the burden on their shoulders as they can consume their free
time
 playing
such
 online games or activities.
In addition
, due to the popularity of technological
amusement
 not only on computers but
also
 on mobile phones and smart TVs , it is likely easier and quicker to approach the numerous
entertainment
 forms through mouse clicks than engaging in outside activities.
As a result
, online
amusement
 seems to be a cost-effort-saving method for the citizens in
this
 stage who have been having short free
time
Nevertheless
, spending too much
time
 in front of screens might cause more problems regarding mental and physical issues.
first
 off, it is universal that technological devices have been affecting negatively physical health since it leads to eye irritation, energy drain, and brain and focus ability impairment.
Moreover
, consuming most of one's free
time
 online
amusement
 could lead to weakening society's relationships
such
 as family relationships due to being lack of interaction among family members. On a bigger scale, the more the number of individuals who are likely addicted to virtual
entertainment
 increases the less community-minded the citizens are. In conclusion,
although
 the positive impacts of
technology
 are relatively definite, its drawbacks overweight clearly its advantages if humankind is addicted to it as an
amusement
 way. Keeping balance in engaging in outdoor and indoor activities might work wonder in gratifying our lives
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