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People are living in a ‘throwaway society,’ using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to?

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The diagram shows the process by which a production line makes a frozen fish pie. Overall, the production process consists of eighteen stages, beginning with delivering materials to a production line and ending up with a delivery truck coming to take away the frozen goods.


First
 of all, potatoes are delivered to a factory during a month. After that, the material is cleaned before being peeled and sliced.
Next
, workers boil the potatoes in water, making them cool down in a container before being stored.

 Another material delivered is fresh salmon, put lemon juice and salt over it to taste. After they are steamed in an oven, the workers carefully remove the skins and bones of salmons. The
next
 step is for an assembly line worker who checks if the fish have been cleaned. Following
this
, the staff wrap the food materials which are prepared potatoes, pears and sauce, as well as processed salmon, into containers microwaveable.
Subsequently
, the goods will wait for dispatch in 12 hours after being freezing
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • throwaway society
  • consumer culture
  • material possession
  • status symbol
  • planned obsolescence
  • disposable items
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • environmental impact
  • waste management
  • sustainability
  • immediate gratification
  • psychological implications
  • resource consumption
  • advertising influence
  • economic effects
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