Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The
use
of laptops and smartphones in today's society is increasing so rapidly for purpose of communicate
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communicating
each
other. It is believed that it had Change preposition
with each
adverse
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an adverse
affect
on Replace the word
effect
reading
and writing Correct article usage
the reading
skill
of individuals. I partially support Fix the agreement mistake
skills
this
statement. This
article will discuss both aspects and a reasonable conclusion.
To commence with, the merits of these technical devices. The
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First
first
and foremost, these computers and laptops are major
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a major
way
to establish a link with all the people around the world. These things Fix the agreement mistake
ways
plays
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play
major
role in good connections among several countries Add an article
a major
of
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around
globe
.Apart from Add an article
the globe
this
,mobile phones helps
society in case of any big disaster. Change the verb form
help
For
instance
when Add a comma
,instance
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Assam
assam
state was suffering from Correct article usage
the assam
flood
,the world knows Correct article usage
a flood
there
problem just because of these telephones. Correct your spelling
their
Therefore
,these devices plays
an important role in the development of Change the verb form
play
nation
.
On the flip side,the Add an article
the nation
a nation
use
of these newly invented things have
a negative impact on our reading as well as writing skills. The Change the verb form
has
use
of these devices for more time reduces our thinking power and also
strength
of our eyes which creates problems for us while reading. Add an article
the strength
a strength
For instance
, a survey states that 71% children
are suffering from mental illness and 78% Change preposition
of children
suffering
from eye problems,just because of sitting in front of Wrong verb form
suffer
screen
for Add an article
a screen
the screen
long
time. Change the article
a long
Moreover
, the awareness of the
telecommunications makes people Correct article usage
apply
more lazy
as they just type on keyboards rather than Replace the words
lazier
paper
, which may Change preposition
on paper
leads
to reduces Change the verb form
lead
their
writing power.
In conclusion, it is stated that the excessive Correct pronoun usage
apply
use
of these mechanics creates a lot of trouble for mankind but it is true that it's
advantages somewhere outweigh these problems Replace the word
its
at
some extent. So the Change preposition
to
use
of these machinery
should be in Replace the word
machines
proper
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a proper
the proper
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite