Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
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of laptops and smartphones in today's society is increasing so rapidly for purpose of
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each
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other. It is believed that it had
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affect
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on
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the reading
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and writing
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of individuals. I partially support
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statement.
This
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article will discuss both aspects and a reasonable conclusion. To commence with, the merits of these technical devices.
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first
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and foremost, these computers and laptops are
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way
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to establish a link with all the people around the world. These things
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major
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role in good connections among several countries
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globe
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.Apart from
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,mobile phones
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society in case of any big disaster.
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instance
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when
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assam
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state was suffering from
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,the world knows
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problem just because of these telephones.
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,these devices
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an important role in the development of
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the nation
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. On the flip side,the
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of these newly invented things
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a negative impact on our reading as well as writing skills. The
use
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of these devices for more time reduces our thinking power and
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strength
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the strength
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of our eyes which creates problems for us while reading.
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, a survey states that 71%
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of children
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are suffering from mental illness and 78%
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from eye problems,just because of sitting in front of
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for
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time.
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, the awareness of
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telecommunications makes people
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as they just type on keyboards rather than
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, which may
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to reduces
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writing power. In conclusion, it is stated that the excessive
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of these mechanics creates a lot of trouble for mankind but it is true that
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advantages somewhere outweigh these problems
at
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to
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some extent. So the
use
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of these
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should be in
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a proper
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way
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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