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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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According to the masses,
Music
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 brings together
people
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 from different races, cultures and age groups. I strongly agree with
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 statement. I think
music
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 Transcends our cultural heritage.
People
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 from different ethnicities and traditions set their differences aside when it comes to
music
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. Not only do
songs
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 introduce the history and living style of
people
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 from different areas but, it
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 teaches foreign language to their listeners,
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 I learned a lot of Korean words from listening to different Korean
songs
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 and I
also
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 learned about their living style. It can
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 be seen in different festivals and Tablo shows, where
people
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 belonging to different cultures come and perform their different folk
songs
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 and the crowd enjoys it. Especially at wedding
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 different traditional
songs
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 unite the masses. I
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 think that
music
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 is a way of getting to know the older generation.
Music
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 is a universal language and
people
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, old and young enjoy it alike. In today’s world some studios
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 as coke studio, and Nescafe basement, are remaking old
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. They are giving a twist to old
songs
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 by adding some modern techniques like techno and rap. These types of
songs
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 are becoming really popular in my country. To give an example, I really enjoy listening to remodelled
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 with my grandparents. I think that
music
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 has eliminated the age gap between generations and made it possible to communicate with elders easier. In conclusion, I would like to say that
Music
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 Unites
people
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 across the globe. Different populations, generations, and races find entertainment through
music
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural diversity
  • harmony
  • integration
  • bridging gaps
  • foster
  • ignite
  • embrace
  • communicate
  • celebrate
  • appreciate
  • inclusivity
  • universal language
  • emotional resonance
  • shared experiences
  • intercultural dialogue
  • intergenerational connections
  • cultural exchange
  • catalyst
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