Some people think that work is the most important thing of people's life. Without the success of a career, life becomes meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is undeniable that
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and
career
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became
one
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of the most important aspects of
people
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’s
life
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. Not just it is the way
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find the means to support themselves and their families but it is
one
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of the crucial factors that most
people
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will take into account when determining
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’s success. Despite how essential it is, I do not believe that the success of a
career
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is the only thing that matters in
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and it certainly does not define who we are as a person. I will elaborate more on
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in the
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paragraph.
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and foremost, the success of a
career
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is associated a lot with how much
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one
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can make, and the notion that our only intrinsic values are how much we can
work
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and how much economic
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we can produce only became popular and entrenched in
people
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’s minds because of the capitalistic ideal which places importance on how much profit or economic than everything else.
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,
people
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associate their values with
career
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achievement and level of income which despite being a really popular idea, it is the fact.
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, university professors are likely to make less
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than a lot of high-level corporate employees but it does not mean being a professor has less merit or provides less
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to society as a whole.
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, indeed, our society does not place an equal amount of attention and admiration on every
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and occupation.
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, blue-collar workers generally have fewer merits in the eyes of
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in society than careers like doctors, lawyers, or even white-collar jobs like corporate workers. Because of
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, a lot of
people
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are forced to pursue a
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they do not feel passionate about which can later result in
people
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being resentful toward their jobs and eventually burnout. And even if they fought their way to the top of the field, it still does not mean that person feels satisfied with their
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.
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, there is more to
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’s
life
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than
work
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. There are plenty of activities that
people
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do outside of
work
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like spending time with loved ones, pursuing hobbies and interests, connect with other
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in the community. Despite not being related to
money
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and economic
value
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, these activities still bring us joy and happiness. In conclusion, despite how
work
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and
career
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are very important in terms of producing income and economic
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. It is not all that humans are meant to do in
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. We are not a machine that only has
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purpose which is to produce goods
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, we should not define our
value
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by how much profit or
money
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we can make. There is more to us than that.
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