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More and more people are opting for and consuming ready-made food instead of freshly cooked food. Does this practice has more advantages than disadvantages? Discuss

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Nowadays,
people
 choose ready-to-eat foods over fresh-cooking
food
.
Although
this
 may not look tasty to eat and have limited menus, it allows
people
 to save
time
 cooking and be convenient for everywhere. and I believe these privileges farther any potential disadvantages. There are two main benefits to
eat
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eating
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 ready-made
food
.
Firstly
,
a
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apply
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ready-to-eat dishes could save
time
 for cooking.
Instance
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For instance
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, if we make some dishes for breakfast, we will spend more
time
 preparing ingredients and raw materials for cooking.
In addition
, ready-made
food
 could make everybody convenient to take
meal
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meals
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 everywhere.
For example
, If we continue an important meeting, we will have lunch probably in a meeting room and
this
 is easy to manage.
On the other hand
, fresh cooking
food
 is more look tasty. There have
a
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cookery smell and finish look
could
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that could
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 attract
people
 who want to taste it.
In addition
, the already made
food
 has limited menus.
For example
, convenience shops
such
 as 7-11,
they
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do not have various choices for ready-to-eat
food
.
Then
people
 will repeatedly consume the same dishes which could make them unhappy in the long run. In conclusion, the ready-made
food
 will not look tasty and have limited manus.
However
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 they can be saved cooking
time
 and be convenient for eating everywhere. I believe these advantages are greatly more than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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