In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

These days, It is becoming
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that many
companies
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their
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new by any means . In my opinion,
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strategy will provoke
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competition
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.
Therefore
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think that
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new
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can exert
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effect
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human’s
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life. The main cause of
companies
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on their new product is consumers look for
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novelty when they buy new
products
. Nowadays, there are already many
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in the world
also
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is similar so
people
get tired of existing goods.
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people
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specific
products
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a company
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company
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companies
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make goods that never existed before. It can lead to
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of
company
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. Take
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example of Samsung which is
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of electronic devices. Samsung published smart phone which
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able to fold. It attracted a lot of individuals and it brought enormous success based on the fact that It has
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appearance
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which
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. I believe that
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circumstance that
companies
produce new things
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an important role in
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of technology skills. When every
company
pursue new
products
, they will compete
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other to invent more remarkable
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. During
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, they will work harder than before the
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to surpass other
company
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resulting in
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of their ability. When
people
have excellent skills aspect of technology, they will make more variety and superb
products
, which bring
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in
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life.
For example
, in the past,
people
do not have electronic devices
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technology became active and
competition
among
companies
, nowadays it is vital in
people
’s lives. To sum up, it is clear that
companies
try to make
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that do not exist before in that a lot of individuals pursue new things when they buy new things. I think that it brings
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effect because it can
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to
people
to live more comfortable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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