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In the future, robots will do more and more jobs instead of humans. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?

#future #robots #jobs #humans #development
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this
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 technological advancement era,
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the robot
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robot
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robots
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 will soon be
norm
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the norm
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. Many of the
task
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tasks
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 which
are
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 performed by
humans
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 will soon be replaced by machines and
robots
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. In my
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this
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 change will have more benefits than drawbacks.
Robots
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 can perform many
task
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. One of the advantages is it can
work
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 in dangerous and hazardous environments
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 as working with explosives,
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and deadly
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 chemicals or in
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production areas or where high temperatures thing needs to be handled.
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Moreover
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 they
work
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 faster and
does
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do
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 not need sick leaves or holidays, whereas
humans
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 require breaks during the day to maintain focus and productivity.
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 will lead to higher productivity and consistency. Most
of
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the
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people
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 hate their
jobs
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 and
instead
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 they can do more interesting
work
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.
Jobs
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 which are
labor
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 intensive and repetitive will be replaced by
robots
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. To maintain the quality of
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the task
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, it can be supervised by
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. Despite
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this
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 advantages,
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 transformation will be far from painless. Many
people
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 will lose their job in
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 short period of time. They will have to relocate and find similar or better
jobs
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 in order to feed their families and
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 the bills.
Jobs
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 where
human
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humans
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interact
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such
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 as salespeople and waiters will be replaced and due to that
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fewer
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 human interactions will occur which will lead to
people
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 getting
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lonelier than ever.
Robot
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Robots
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 are only
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programmed
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programed
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programmed
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 to do
certain
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a certain
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type
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types
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 of
operation
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operations
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 and
people
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 will have to learn to deal with them and find the
work
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 around
this
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 development. To conclude, I still believe that
robots
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 will have
more
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a more
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 positive impact
in
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 the world. The benefits that
robots
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 bring are better for
humans
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 even if it doesn't look that way
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during
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 the transition period.
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 change will not be easy for
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 but
its
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 better
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the long
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long term
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 perspective.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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