In the future, robots will do more and more jobs instead of humans. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?

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this
technological advancement era,
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robot
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robots
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will soon be
norm
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. Many of the
task
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which
are
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performed by
humans
will soon be replaced by machines and
robots
. In my
opinion
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this
change will have more benefits than drawbacks.
Robots
can perform many
task
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. One of the advantages is it can
work
in dangerous and hazardous environments
such
as working with explosives,
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chemicals or in
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production areas or where high temperatures thing needs to be handled.
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they
work
faster and
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not need sick leaves or holidays, whereas
humans
require breaks during the day to maintain focus and productivity.
This
will lead to higher productivity and consistency. Most
of
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the
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people
hate their
jobs
and
instead
they can do more interesting
work
.
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which are
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intensive and repetitive will be replaced by
robots
. To maintain the quality of
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, it can be supervised by
humans
. Despite
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this
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advantages,
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people
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short period of time. They will have to relocate and find similar or better
jobs
in order to feed their families and
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the bills.
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where
human
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humans
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interact
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such
as salespeople and waiters will be replaced and due to that
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human interactions will occur which will lead to
people
getting
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lonelier than ever.
Robot
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are only
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programmed
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programed
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programmed
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to do
certain
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type
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of
operation
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and
people
will have to learn to deal with them and find the
work
around
this
development. To conclude, I still believe that
robots
will have
more
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positive impact
in
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the world. The benefits that
robots
bring are better for
humans
even if it doesn't look that way
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the transition period.
This
change will not be easy for
people
but
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better
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the long
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perspective.
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