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In some countries a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenager. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?

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Nowadays, teenagers have independence, so they usually do everything in personal ways. It is very easy to embark on major problems of the era
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 as murder, kidnapping, stole many things. There are many reasons leading to a high proportion of criminal acts in teenagers in almost countries around the world.
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, more and more people are suffering from parental neglect. Their
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 never take care about thinking of their children. They just know earn money. Many sons never get advice from their
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. And it accidentally makes the percentage of juvenile delinquency increase.
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 that, peer pressure is one of the reasons. They always must do almost things better than classmates
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 as the result of the exam. They have less
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 to play outdoor activities and sometimes they feel stressed. So doing unlawful acts
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 as smoking is a comfortable thing in their life. Dealing with juvenile delinquency is very difficult because my
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 don't have enough
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 to take care of my son. We need to spend more
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 playing with family members. Teenagers want to feel love from their
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. Good education in school
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 plays an important role. The student doesn't have strain when they are studying. Fighting in the education environment needs to solved be equip surveillance cameras and must have a harsh punishment. Humans have to build the best education in their countries. In conclusion, the rate of juvenile delinquency is easy to control.
Parents
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 should spend a lot of
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 understanding their children and know their children's desires for something. Teachers as government must control problems in their schools and the appearance of
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. They have more programs to raise awareness among students about the consequences of criminal activities.
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