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In some countries a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenager. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?

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In recent years, the growing percentage of juvenile delinquency has become a pressing controversy.
This
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this
 complicated phenomenon, identify the relevant contributing factors and bring up feasible
countermeasure
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. For a start, there is an array of integrated factors contributing to
this
 complicated phenomenon. Chief among causes is
a
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 place where
teenagers
were
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lived. Many
children
 lived in
the
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wealthy family so we have enough food and clothes. It
is
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accidentally
make
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 many poor
children
 always want to same thing. They can do many unlawful activities
such
 as murder if acts can help them have
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many
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any
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 money.
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 that, because of
poor
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their poor
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 background they have no
choose
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, they must do something for
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a survey
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survey
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such
 as
stolen
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 food and goods. It is,
moreover
, school is one of the reasons make
a
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 rate of teen crime
increasing
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. In
the
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class,
teenagers
 can be had
a
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harsh punishment.
They
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 easy feel
stress
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 and boring. They don’t want to go to school to study. Leading to awareness of
student
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students
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 will be limited and easy embark on evils.
Teacher
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Teachers
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 don’t understand the students when they
in
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period
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 they very acute.
They
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 easy approach many bad
cultural
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. Confronted with
such
 as thorny issue, we should come up with a variety of effective countermeasures.
First
 of all, having some punishment when
teenagers
 do criminal activities even
this
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if this
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 is a petty crime.
In
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this
 moment, they feel scared and never do
this
 again. Education programs need to approach the consequences of criminal acts, helping
teenagers
 avoid bad
cultural
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.
Policy
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The policy
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 of government
need
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 to achieve immediate,
helping
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help
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 poor
family
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families
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 and
decreasing
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burden
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 financial. Parents should take care of their
son
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sons
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 and talk some advice and experience when they have
a
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 same age with
children
. Spending a lot of time playing
outdoors
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 activities
instead
 of surfing the internet. In conclusion,
a
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 rate of teen crime increasing
by
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for
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 many reasons
come
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comes
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 from family,
school
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and school
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. They need to have more
solution
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solutions
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 to solve
this
 problem.
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The teacher
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Teacher
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 should
listen
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 everything from
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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. And in the family, parents
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ma
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may
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 have more time with
children
 and teach them more
valued
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 lessons.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • therefore
  • however
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  • despite

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