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The use of Social Media is replacing face-to-face contact with many people. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #contact #people
Usage of social media becoming more popular in our society. Though, it is replacing real communication, which is the most obvious part of
person's
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 development. Undoubtedly, I am in favour of face-to-face contact.
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, face-to-face contact
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 our soft skills, connected with socialization.
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, shy people are trying to avoid real communication, and replace it with virtual. I do not consider, that it is the right choice. In modern society, each person should be socializable, communicable and open. Even in interviews,
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employee
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 will
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definitely
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 easy-going employer.
Secondly
, in Social
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 everything is not as safe, as everybody thinks. Your account or credit card can be hacked,
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, you can even become homeless. Indeed, you can meet so rude people.
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,
cyberbulling
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cyberbullying
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. Many teenagers
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suffer from it.
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, one more advantage - empathy. When you
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see the person's emotions, you get his energy. Yet, I hold the view, that online-chatting
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is
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 takes your energy, not gives. In brief, I want to
reitrate
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reiterate
, that advantages, for sure,
outweight
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outweigh
 the disadvantages.
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