Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that
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number of school graduates who
wants
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to take a year in order to travel and gain work
experience
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increasing.
Personally
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I think it is a great tendency as
this
time gives young people various opportunities to get to know what real life is, to understand what they want to do in their life, what career to choose and to avoid mistakes and lost time studying wrong things.
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essay will provide a closer look at the impact of travelling and post-school labour
experience
on youth.
First
of all, it is a
well known
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fact that travelling to other parts of the world broadens our mind, provide people
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fantastic chance to get to know different cultures, to gain
experience
in different areas of life, so before returning to
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university it can help to the individuals to explore and clearly understand their own genuine interests.
Furthermore
, if a person got an idea about his or her future profession, they can choose some country which is famous for having the best specialist in
this
area, go there , meet them and only after that clearly understand is
this
what they really want to do for the rest of their lives or not.
For example
, visiting Paris or Moscow to see
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can spark an idea and will help them decide on which course to
enroll
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the university.
On the other hand
,
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researched
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have
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shown that pre-university
experience
has an enormous advantage
to
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students when they return to university.
This
is because they can relate what they learn at school to their work.
In addition
, they can compare what they study and what they really need to focus on to become
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competitive and successful
applicant
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for the after-university job.
For example
, working as a barista at Macdonald, teach them about cash, operation and
time-management
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.
Moreover
, they can easier and more
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understand the theoretical aspect of business,
that
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is a great advantage too, in order to outpace future competitors. In conclusion, travelling and getting work
experience
helps students to understand courses’ s theory better, to learn to separate the seeds from the chaff. It is clear as
sky
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to me that it is a wonderful and beneficial idea to take a year out. It is highly recommended to all school graduates
to
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take a gap year in order to gain some
experience
before enrolling on higher education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Non-academic life
  • Resume
  • Job market
  • Personal development
  • Broaden their worldviews
  • Academic pressures
  • Renewed focus
  • Loss of academic momentum
  • Career goals
  • Informed decisions
  • Soft skills
  • Communication
  • Problem-solving
  • Adaptability
  • Financial burden
  • Prolonged break
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