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Some think that young people should be free to choose any career they like, while others say that they should think more realistically about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people feel that
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 should school at a very early
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. Others argue that the
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 of
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 is a suitable
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 to start school for
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. There are numerous thoughts which I believe on which
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 is convenient for
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 but some of
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 research suggests that
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age
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 is an appropriate
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 because an infant reaches a mature level and their cognitive skills develop at
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 education life at a premature
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 may lead to cause irreplaceable communication defects because scion may not understand each other at the end of the day they may quarrel steadily.
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, if they don’t agree with the same idea, they might insult because of a lack of mature behaviour.
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, there are others who firmly believe that the
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 of
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 may prevent some of the problems which take place during these ages because offspring can decide what they want and explain their ideas to anybody.
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, they may resolve an intricate problem.
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, they socialize very swiftly with their friends around
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 they can start a conscious conversation.
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, we should know what
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 do because anybody doesn’t want to frustrate
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’s life. We have a playbook and we have to exert it in the education system successfully. The
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 of
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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