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Some people believe that wild animals should not be kept in zoos or other man-made environments as there is no longer a need for them in the 21st century. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the changes in time, the majority of the population thinks that zoological species should not be in cages or other artificial environments. I totally agree with
this
 statement. In
this
 essay, I will provide my reasons and a brief explanation in the following paragraphs.
Although
 beasts can’t think like a human who can control and arrange their affairs and life, wild
animals
 need to be treated like people, they need to have basic rights,
such
 as the freedom to live in the wild. In some countries like Africa and Singapore, zoos don’t have any fences and give the wild
animals
 a great amount of space. When I visited Singapore, I felt that the wild species had more comfort and freedom than in other wildlife destinations.
Moreover
, some people maintain that wild beasts need to have a natural environment in
this
 modern society if wild
animals
 live in zoos or man-made places, they can gradually lose their natural instincts, and
then
 they will become endangered or some exotic animal will replace them. In conclusion, the most important thing is that we need to keep the wild species in a natural environment,
that is
 why we have to take away the fences and create some limits, allowing the
animals
 to have more freedom, so they can live longer.
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