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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my concern about living in the college room with another student.
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, I will explain the problem in more
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 in the following letter.
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, I have a college room which I share
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with another student but there are many issues with the arrangement which make it harder for me to study and work.
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, the interests and major specialization are not the same for both of us.
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, my college colleague is making a lot of noise which
make
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 it difficult for me to concentrate
in
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 my
study
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 and
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 my assignments.
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, he doesn't have discipline so it will be more difficult to do my work.
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, I would like to move to another room alone if
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possible or with another student who has the same major
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 me so we can share
same
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 interests and help each other to do the assignments. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as you
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 my letter. Yours Faithfully, Ahmed Alostaz

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task achievement
Try to use more specific examples to highlight the problems with your current living situation. Specific examples will help to give a clearer picture of the issues you are facing.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the flow between sentences and paragraphs to ensure smoother transitions. This can help improve the logical structure of your letter.
task achievement
The letter clearly identifies the problem, explains the difficulties faced, and suggests a possible solution. This shows a good understanding of the task.
coherence and cohesion
The letter uses appropriate greeting and closing phrases, maintaining a respectful and formal tone throughout.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a single idea, making the letter organized and easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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