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Today, many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time doing sports. What are the reasons for this, and is it a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 present world,
children
 have many activities to do in their daily lives.
However
, many
children
 are so immersed in
computer
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a computer
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game
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games
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 that
do
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does
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 not want to go outside in order to do physical activities. It
become
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becomes
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 an emergency condition
to
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for
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children
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children's
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 development. Analysing the
the
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temptation of computer
games
 to
children
, as well as the lack of
sports
 for
children
 will clarify these matters.
Firstly
, computer game
contents
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content
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 are developed to
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attract
extract
actract
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attract
children
’s attention.
For instance
, it is could be made based on a fairytale story with many
heros
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heroes
 in the
games
 that
children
 could play as these models to get the victory. So, these
games
 are successful
to
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awake
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children
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children's
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 desire to
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achieve
achive
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achieve
 their dreams,
lead
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leading
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 to they cannot
log
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logging
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 out of these programmes.
Thus
,
this
 is the reason why
children
 feel difficult to stand up when they begin to play a game.
Secondly
,
nowaday
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nowadays
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, the lack of physical activities for
children
 in their daily life could be a
sadness
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 situation.
For example
,
children
 are kept
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indoors
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indoor
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indoors
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 for a long time
instead
 of being outside to play
sports
cause
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because
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 their parents do not give time for them. The parents often concentrate on work to afford for
family’s
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the family’s
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 daily
cost
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, so they could not spend time
to take
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taking
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 the
children
 to the nature area frequently to
to
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do
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sports
.
Therefore
, it becomes
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apparent
apperant
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apparent
 that
children
 have little chance to go outside for
sports
. In conclusion, I believe that the
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situation
situtation
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situation
that
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in that
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children
 do
commputer
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computer
games
 a lot
instead
 of playing
sports
 is
negative
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a negative
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 development for
children
. I suggest that parents should take care
about
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of
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 their
children
 so that they could be grown up well in both mental and physical health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • captivate
  • supervise
  • accessible
  • scarcity
  • safer alternative
  • peer pressure
  • educational tools
  • cognitive skills
  • implications
  • obesity
  • poor posture
  • hand-eye coordination
  • problem-solving abilities
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