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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of advertisements which try to persuade children to buy snacks, toys, and other goods. Parents often claim that these ads are unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is claimed that children are bombarded by a plethora of
advertisements
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 that illustrate the tempting
goods
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 for youngsters like toys or snacks in different countries. It is declared by
parents
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 that these
advertisements
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 are not reasonable and acceptable. According to the
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 view, the purpose of these ads is for kids as they have the power to convince their
parents
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 by force to purchase
goods
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 that display on TV or anywhere else.
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, it causes to soar the purchase rate for that company.
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, we know all kids and youngsters are enthusiastic about funny toys and junk as well.
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, once they encounter these
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 which advertise and publicity these types of
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 in a funny way due to stimulating the feeling they buy it, so they do anything that they can to obtain it like crying or nagging.
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, in another view,
parents
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 protest against these ads as unappreciated ones. Indeed, the victim of these ads is
parents
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 eventually. It is clear that
parents
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 will be influenced by their children.
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, they have to buy
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 to make them happy and calm. In fact, most of these
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 like toys are useless and pricy.
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, I should point out the snacks as they are unsound. In conclusion, concerning raising the
advertisements
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 which target children to force their
parents
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 to purchase unsuitable stuff and unhealthy food. In my viewpoint, I completely agree with
parents
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 I can realize how it is tough to obey children’s words when they want non-functional stuff
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