Some people think that politicians have the greatest influence on the world, while others believe that scientists are more influential. Discuss both sides of view and give your opinion.

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Some individuals think that
politicians
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have the greatest effect on the
world
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while others believe that
scientists
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are more effective.
This
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essay will discuss both sides of view and give a result.
Firstly
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,
politicians
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are great leaders. Their authority is limitless
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they are more influential than
scientists
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. Research conducted by CNN revealed that 90% of
decision
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made
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maden
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made
by
politicians
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. They shape
future
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the future
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with their decisions. All of the president
politicians
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but not all
of
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scientists
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the scientists
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. They manage
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the country
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country
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economy,
therefore
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,
politicians
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are take
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more responsible than
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a scientist
the scientist
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scientist
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scientists
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. As for
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politicians
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are more effective than
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a scientist
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scientist
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scientists
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. I have got 2 reasons.The
first
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reason is
Politicians
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are manage
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whole
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the whole
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country and
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world
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the world
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But
scientists
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are just responsible for
lab
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the lab
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.
Such
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as Donald Trump manages
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the country's
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relationships but Aziz Sancar just deals with lab and some type of topic.
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,
scientists
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invent or discover so many things in the lab.
Scientists
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are very smart people compared to
politicians
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. An extensive survey conducted by CNBC revealed that 80% of improvements made by
scientists
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therefore
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are more crucial than
politicians
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.
Such
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as Jordan
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found a vaccine in 1867.
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he improved vaccines and untangled so many illnesses.
This
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improvement very positively affected the
world
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. The
second
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reason is
technology
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.
Technology
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is the one of most influential
thing
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things
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to do
world
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. Research conducted recently indicated that Scientist
contribute
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to
development
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the development
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of
technology
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However
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,
politicians
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does
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not much affect
technology
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To conclude, Both of them change the
world
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but
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Politicians
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decisions and authority
more
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are more
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influential than
scientists
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. Professor suggested that
Politicians
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are the most effective people in the
world
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.
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