More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

A proper balance of all living and non-living
beings
will result in an excellent ecosystem.
However
,
with
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the growing intervention and manipulation by
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human
beings
result in
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destruction
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distruction
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destruction
of
natural
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habitat of other living
beings
. Huge species of animal are at the edge of extinction, along with others who fall under
endangered
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list. The reason behind it and the way we can reverse
such
loss will be discussed in
this
essay. Why are we slowly losing our precious wild living
beings
? The primary reason is the growing need
of
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vacant land,
increasing
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population, which result in
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of
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more space, which causes deforestation and
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destruction
distruction
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of forest land, a home of those species.
For instance
, the Indian forest lost
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beauty with
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of cheetah, due to excessive exploitation of
forest
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.
Furthermore
, hunting became a major contributor
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the
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endangered
animals
. A lot of wild
animals
are hunted down for several
purpose
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like
for
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food, status symbol, cloth, medicinal purpose, etc. In India, the Rhino is at the edge of extinction, they were hunted down for their precious horn which
hold
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a great market value and
used
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in various medicine. Adding to
this
, they are used as
status
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symbol
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to represent the wealth and success of a people.
Hence
, we lost our wild
animals
, some of which
are
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also
fall under
endangered
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the endangered
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list. In order to preserve them,
government
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should put more
regulation
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over
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deforestation, as well as putting more stringent rules to discourage people
for
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illegally hunting these
animals
. To illustrate,
Government
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of India, formulate numerous
rule
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and
regulation
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which will put
restriction
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over
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illegal
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cutting of trees. Along with it, there must have proper awareness
among
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society. To do so, people have floated Non-profit
organization
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which are gathering a lot of members to put collective efforts
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preserving
environment
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. Institutes like Global Wildlife Conservation,
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events around the globe to spread awareness
towards
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animal preservation. In the conclusion, these creatures are crucial for a healthy ecosystem, along with Government strictness, everyone should
also
keep themselves aware
about
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the importance of their presence in our environment. By doing so, we can achieve our dream of
well-balanced
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the well-balanced
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ecosystem.
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