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do you agree or disagree with the following statement it is a waste of money for governments fo fund space travel of space exploration

#waste #money #governments #fo #fund #space #travel #exploration
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Thanks to the advancement in science, it is much easier for
people
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 to
travel
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 in the solar system. Manned
spacecrafts
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spacecraft
 have been sent to the Moon and Mars for
space
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 exploration. There
are
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also
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 commercial
space
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travel
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 available. Some argue that it is a waste of
taxpayer’s
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 money to support
space
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 missions. From my point of view, I believe that
space
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 exploitation has far-reaching benefits for
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mankind.
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space
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travel
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 brings impetus for scientific and technological innovations. In order to guarantee the safety and success of
space
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travel
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,
scientists
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 and engineers have to develop new rockets and
spacecrafts
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spacecraft
.
As a result
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, tremendous breakthroughs will be made in fields including
astronomoy
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astronomy
, physics and engineering.
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, China has successfully launched manned rockets to
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space
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, which led to significant
innnovations
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innovations
innovation
. Astronomers have been trained and they succeeded in
space
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 exploitation. After the mission, they gather important
data
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 and
sample
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samples
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 from
the
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space
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. The
space
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 mission has greatly contributed to
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scientific development. In the
second
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 place,
space
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 trips provide better
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options
opitons
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options
 for
people
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 to understand the universe. Unlike dealing with
data
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 from telescopes or
satelittes
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satellites
satellite
, astronauts can bring
sample
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samples
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 directly from other stars and conduct experiments in the solar system. Only
through
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this
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 way can the
scientists
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 have
first
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-hand raw
data
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 from
the
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outer
space
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.
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,
scientists
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 can explore
into
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the solar system and learn more about other stars. To illustrate,
scientists
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 now have more
data
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of
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the
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Mars because of the
data
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 obtained from the
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spacecraft
spacecraft's
spacecrafts
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spacecraft
 sent to
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 star. I concede that it would be costly to fund
space
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travel
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.
However
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, it is worthwhile to fund
such
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 research. Not only it brings scientific innovations to us, but
also
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 it
provide
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 opportunities to explore possible homes in other stars for our future generations. In the case of
catastorphes
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catastrophes
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,
people
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 might need to set up new homes outside the Earth.
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, it would be sensible for
people
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 to explore
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the universe in advance. In conclusion, I think that the government should fund
space
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travel
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 and
space
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 exploitation, as it is crucial for
the
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scientific and technological development.
Moreover
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,
space
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 trips can enable
people
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 to have
better
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 understanding of the universe, which would be of
vital
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 importance
of
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 human
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existence
existance
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existence
.
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