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With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

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The internet is a very good place to get not only useful information which can help in some situations, but
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 there is a lot of malware, some dangerous websites with prohibited information, and pornography which is not suitable for young people, but I consider that every child should
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 the web in the way that they want, and so parents should not interfere with children’s business. The main reason why I disagree with
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 opinion is the limiting of children’s activity, from my point of view if children find something prohibited on the net, he or she should leave
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 without someone else’s orders, and
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 I think that everyone can explore the cyberspace freely, and so parents must not limit us. The best example is me because every time when I would like to
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 the network, no one limits me so I can visit every
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 which I want. If I decide to visit a
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 like a drugstore, I can do it, and
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 on the dark web I sometimes find
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markets which sell banned software or credit information of a person and things like
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. I am doing it only for educational purposes and to knowing something new. On the other side, In my ,opinion children should not visit
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 till the age of 14, because
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 can change their psychic or their character in a bad way so parents can
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 the programs like parent control or in the router’s settings they can
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 the option which named
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 filtering, for additional security. In conclusion, I can say that every child should
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 the internet in the right way which they think but they must not overstep the border of reasonable, they can learn something new but not more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dangerous situations
  • limit access to the internet
  • inappropriate content
  • online predators
  • physical and mental health
  • monitoring and guiding
  • online safety
  • school curriculum
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