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Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 day and age, sporting
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 are an integral part of the global nation in which countries intend to participate and may go
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 to
host
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such
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 competitions. Some people are of the opinion that holding
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 sporting
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 is not financially justifiable, whereas many maintain that through hosting
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sports
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events
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 great opportunities for countries can be provided to demonstrate their various qualities. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view. Concerning the merits of holding athletic competitions, there are myriad merits. For one thing, the development of the tourism industry of the hosting
country
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 will be prone to be accelerated. To be more specific, tourism facilities like restaurants, museums, and historical sites will be attended to more than before by the people in charge.
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, local businesses will be more adapted to the tourists' needs for entertaining, spending time, and watching their favourite
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 contests. For another thing, according to global standards, all public amenities should be considered to be enhanced.
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 adequate budget must be allocated to have them appear convenient and comfortable in front of the sights of foreign fans of sporting
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. Essentially, It is incumbent upon the authorities of the holder
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 to represent their economic capabilities to handle financial concerns regarding holding international
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.
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, the
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 of the competitors has no alternative but to display the athletic potential of the hosting nation ranging from the professional sportspeople to facilities relevant to covering all aspects of that event to display internationally.
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, that kind of sport will be promoted around the world which is completely contingent on the quality of advertising and broadcasting of the event. I would admit that holding international
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 contests are extremely extravagant that may appear surplus expense at all.
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, many
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 activities are not as profitable as the football world cup in which the return of the investment to the
host
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country
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 can be guaranteed. Despite that, the created passion and enthusiasm between people and the youth of the hosting nation to pursue
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\ing activities bring immense physical, mental, and psychological benefits to the society of the
host
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country
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. In conclusion, there is no room for doubt about the enormously costly procedure when it comes to hosting the international athletic champions. Even though, from my perspective, the advantages of holding some
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events
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 are vast to take into consideration.
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