The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The layouts display the industrial
area
of Norbiton, how it looks at
present
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the present
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and
the
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its planned future development.
Overall
, it is apparent that the industrial
area
will be transformed
to
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a residential
area
with
addition
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the addition
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of a variety of structures including housing, shops,
medical
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a medical
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centre
& school. First and foremost, the
centre
of the
area
will have four connecting roads which are currently just two. Surrounding the
centre
from the west side are three factories in the present time which will be replaced by three houses to the northwest, shops at
southwest
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and a medical
centre
at
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southeast
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the southeast
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. Moving to the east side from
central
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junction
, we have five factories currently which will be demolished to construct houses and
playground
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playgrounds
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on the sides on the sides of the road and
school
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a school
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at the end
.
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road will be constructed from
central
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the central
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junction
to the farmland in
northern
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the northern
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direction with
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the inlcusion
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inlcusion
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inclusion
of new settlements.
On the other hand
, the road to the south from
central
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the central
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junction
will observe a circular
junction
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, centre, junction with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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