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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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As a world belongs to the 21st century new trends in
technology
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 grows rapidly. Some people say due to
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technology
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 the old things and
lifestyle
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 will change
unbuildably
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unbuildable
. In my
opinion
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 I will agree with
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 statement. Nowadays, using
technology
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 significantly increases all over the world. For
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example
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 most of the community uses online banking
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 of visiting the bank. Online marketing, online bookings e-learning,
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 online education
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 the most popular trends. Communication
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 become very convenient
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 the community. Facebook, WhatsApp, Instagram and
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emails mail
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 brought the world smaller and easier to communicate. Vehicles can move without a driver and banks and offices can function without
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.
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, these things take people apart from each other and their old traditions are washed away. Most of the old skills are based on
manpower
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. Because of
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technology
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manpower
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 was replaced by machines. For
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example, handlooms were
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traditional
skills
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skill
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 in Sri Lanka and India. Making handlooms are a process which takes too much time and hard work and the final product is tremendous.
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, nowadays these looms can be made by using machines. These power looms are high in quality and it is very efficient as
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 do not take
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 a lot of time. It is cheaper than handlooms as the low requirement of
manpower
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.
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technology
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 is economical for a country. In conclusion, the development of
technology
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of
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 a country will affect the die out of traditional skills. I will argue that trying to keep them alive is
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 pointless because it may cause badly to the economy of the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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